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Kibaka
Leaf Genin
 |  Subject: Ready for approval!!!(changed my min I'll just be with konoha) Sun Aug 09, 2009 7:58 pm | |
| How she diedanyway, on with the app. General Information:Name: Fumo Kazuki Age: 11 Gender: Male Looks:He has two clear grey eyes which have an affectionate, but calculating look. He is above the average height for his age(just under 5ft 5") and his large build makes him seem much more dangerous than he really is. He has straight, jet black hair which reaches up to his chin. It doesn't fall around his face, so it doesn't require much maintenance. His olive-tanned skin is a light brown shade. His strong arms have surprisingly agile fingers, and his wrists are covered in a single strap of paper. Usually, he wears green, loose trousers and a tight hugging short sleeve shirt made of a velvety material. His black shirt has the clan symbol on it. All his shirts have the clan symbol on the left shoulder, and his personal crest on his back. On cold days he wears an open black jacket with his crest on the back. his personal crest is (on a black background)  Personality: Kazuki is an affectionate, soft person, despite his large stature. He has a quick mind as agile as his hands, and emphasizes with most people. He laughs when he can, and is the more cheery out of the twins. He has close friendships, but he doesn't reveal many things about himself or his secrets. He keeps other people's secrets, and gossip tends to annoy him. His anger is rare, and he doesn't outwardly show negative emotions. He gets along well with children and animals, and is friendly with many people. Kazuki is quite laid back, and prefers not to take control of things, unless she really has to. He constantly practises speed-origami, and is one of the fastest in his clan at making paper objects without using chakra. He enjoys lolling about with kitao, and he generally is more outwardly open about his feelings and relaxed when around his sister, Kitao. He likes sushi, Animals, Singing, origami, and trees and dislikes arrogant people, gossip, loud noises and Fire. Rank Information:Rank: academy student Village: konoha Skill Information:Skill Specialty: Main: Weaponry Sub: Fuuinjutsu Elemental Affinity: Earth Special Characteristics: Kazuki is a weaponry and fuuinjutsu specialist, and his reflexes and accuracy are very fast for an academy student. He is also ambidextrous. Background Information:When Kazuki and Kitao were born, they had the perfect parents. They were happily married, everything was going well, and they were the perfect match for each other. No arguments, and they were about to establish an art business. But then it all went wrong. One night, when they were at a lake with their children, who had turned one. It had pristine waters, and the plants were full and blooming. They had taken them there becasue they hoped that the children would see one of the most beautiful things on their first birthday. It was all going well. It was a calm and lovely day. Their mother washed her face with water, enjoying the cool sensation. But then, their mother noticed something was wrong. Her children had gone. And so had her husband! She dove inot the water, as feeble attempt to look for them. She panicked, and was unable to surface. She tried to gasp, but breathed in more water, choking and drowning slowly. There was a horrible pain in her chest, worse than any stitch she'd ever had. Slowly dying... Her husband realised that she had kept her head underwater for too long a time. Her body seemed to be shaking. Instantly, he ran to her side. She was in a genjutsu. The babies cried in the background, making him stress and panic. When bending down to his wife, he saw the ninja who was doing it. in blind fury he ran at him, unleashing a huge wave of paper attacks. The ninja was thrown back to the river, but his wife was still drowning. Their father knew that the the only way to save her life, was to end his. Using all of his strength, the father pushed the man in with himself, preventing his escape with his body. His wife seemed to stop struggling. He was happy to die now, even if it meant saving her life. The two crying babies were discovered an hour later with three dead bodies floating in a lake next to them. The father had failed. She had stopped struggling because she had died. Kazuki and Kitao were then taken to their uncle, because her mother had said that if anything happened to her and her husband, they would be taken to their uncle, because he was the most trustworthy man they knew. He would also be able to protect the children. What they didn't know was that he had changed. His sister's death had horribly changed him, and he had just been left by his wife. He had fallen into the routine of drinking himself to sleep in a gutter every week. For the next two years they were raised in his prison. The house was full of rats as big as kittens, and there was a putrid mixture of piss and puke emanating from the walls. He was aggressive when he came back home, and the two children were only allowed to be in one room. He used to roughly handle the twins, and constantly shouted at them, and blamed them for everything. "Worthless little shits!!!" He used to shout across the room. By the third year, they had given up. They were doomed to live a life of hopelessness. Their uncle had raised his hand to them many a time. Both had bruises to prove it. But the last straw was when their uncle tried to touch Kitao. Kazuki was angered so much that he threw a glass bottle at their uncle. It had smashed and knocked him out. Who knew? It probably killed him. No one would know. They had fled from the high up area in which they were being kept, and sought refuge with a small living area of the clan. They now live with their Aunt, who fostered them. Academy Life: Kazuki and his sister where not exactly popular with everyone at school, and Kitao had been especially ridiculed for her eyes. However, they had managed to form a small group of people who saw past the eyes, and truly like them. Although Kazuki and Kitao weren't too close to them, they were still a comfortable stone to lean on. Kazuki, being the more sociable of the two managed to get many of the academy students on his side, and academy got a little easier for him. He was more relaxed, and was able to do better as a result. He is still an academy student. RP Sample:Suki jumped out of bed the second she heard birds alerting her of breaking dawn. "Sunrise..." muttered Suki, looking out of his window, and staring at the grey sky. She wordlessly watched as the sun slowly rose from the sky, until it was, all of a sudden, lighted. She yawned. Not got much sleep had been earned lately, at the Yameni quarters. Anyway, she was too excited to sleep. She'd probably be younger than them. Since she'd passed the academy pretty recently so she'd never been given a squad. She yawned again, and washed her face, cleaned and then got dressed. She wore mainly black clothes, and slipped on a dark, jet-black and silver kimono, which had replaced her bright and usually blue or pink clothes. Today she might as well have dressed nicely, so she wore some shiny silver rings, with gemstones embedded within them. Her mother had told her they would boost the effetiveness of the gens she cast, by making the opponent use more chakra to break out of it. She also put a shiny necklace on. It was a reddish and orangey colour, resembling a hot ember. This made other gens used against her weaker. Then, she left the house. Making sure he forgot none of her equipment, he locked the door, and used a genjutsu to make the doors and windows disappear. (false place) She smirked, thinking of how it confused people daily. On her walk to the academy, she saw a girl, one of her schoolmates infact, poking a guy with a bokken. His butt was sticking out of the window, and he was calling for help. "Why are you just poking him?" she enquired politely, not seeming to make any move to help the poor guy. The other girl smiled at her, and continued poking. Her slight, serious expression breaking into a smile. She took out her fan, and poked him too. This, she believed, would be the beginning of a beautiful friendship
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| | | | Kibaka
Leaf Genin
| | Subject: Re: Ready for approval!!!(changed my min I'll just be with konoha) Sun Aug 09, 2009 7:59 pm | |
| Clan InformationClan Name:Oldowa(I have permission from WTFlash) Name: Odolwa Clan - Spoiler:
Kekkei Genkai: The Odolwa clan's Kekkei Genkai is very simple, however the way they go about using it is more complex. They can activate multiple seals at once with the same amount of chakra, making their uses very efficient.(Usually a seal requires chakra to be set and then chakra to be activated, with the seals tattoo'd to the skin, one must only apply chakra and blood to the seal) A less simple concept of 'Odolwa rituals' that allow for the use of Circle Area Seal techniques; Static Seals whose abilities effect all within their radius. Now for the more interesting part...
The Odolwa clan leaders are refered to as elders, and every new child born into the clan must under-go a ritual of Bonding Life. The baby is pricked and a sample of it's blood collected. The blood is then mixed with a natural ink that is used to tattoo the babies arms from wrist to neck, and then along their colar bone to their neck. The ink itself fades into the babies skin, where it's effects lay dormant until they become Genin. When they turn thirteen, the ritual of release is preformed, where these old tattoo's are reawakened. The user can then began using the Kekkei Genkai to their advantage from that point on, by making perminant summoning connections between ones tattoo and an object or animal. Three summons at Genin level, Five at Chunin, Seven at Jounin, at Ten at S-Rank (Once declared they are perminant to the character). The circle seals are also tattoo'd to the body and are activated through the process of the Clan's secret jutsu.
Secret Clan Jutsu:
Name:Mass summoning Technique (Taju Kuchiyose no Jutsu)
Rank: B
Type: Fuuinjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: This jutsu can only be used with In-animate objects. As an advance of the original summoning jutsu, with the extension of the Kekei Genkai, the Odolwa Clan Members can summon multiple objects at one time by a process known as compilation. In a normal summon, chakra is used and expelled in activating a new seal. With the summoning seal already present in the form of a universal tattoo on the users body, no chakra is wasted in the creation of the seal, and thus can be recycled to summon multiple times. Up to two 'large' objects can be summoned, and up to twenty(20) small objects. This jutsu can be used in place of the original summoning technique, as long as the summoning isn't at any point 'living'.
Name: Release Burst (Kuchiyose dangan no Jutsu)
Rank: C
Type:Fuuinjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: This supplementary effect allows for the user, whenever using a form of summoning jutsu, to activate the summon with kinetics force behind them. Thus, they are summoned and shot out like a projectile. The force is constant, however, so large objects may only travel a meter or two before slowing. However, small objects such as Kunai, and ninja star, can be released at about the same velocity of a normal throw. Unlike normal throws however, shuriken cannot be curved, and only move in linear paths.
Name: Connection Seal Ritual (Saiken Kaibyaku no Jutsu)
Rank: C
Type: Fuuinjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: This Seal can only be successfully cast on a in-animate object. Via physical contact with ones palm to the surface of an object, one can 'brand' the object with an Odolwa seal. Like a fingerprint, each Odolwa seal's appearance differs. Once the Seal is set, it fades into the object, and is then unseen. The 'Ritual' is considered complete. One can then freely summon the object with some variation of summoning jutsu once. After that summon, the seal fades completely and must be re-applied be reapplied via touch before it is possible to summon again. If used on an object that originated from the opponent, it can only be summoned in this way for the remainder of the fight unless permission is granted from the opponent after the fight concludes. This way, no one object is permanently 'stolen'.
Area Effect Circle Seals- Each of the Following jutsu require that the user bring their palm to a tattoo, where chakra in the palm makes a copy of the seal code, and then pressing this chakra to a flat surface, thus activating the seal. All seals are circular and form a radius around the center point, which is in most cases the caster. These seals are static. In other words, once set, they stay in one place. The seal can be placed on any surface, even if the surface is water or not exactly even ground. The effect of the seal itself, unless otherwise stated, takes place within the radius of the seal. The seal is visible to all as a white circle, edged with symbols of the Odolwa that are unique to each individual member. In a battle situation, each Circle Seal can only be cast once in a battle, and can only be broken by a seal realease, those with 'Fuuinjutsu' specialty with a jutsu of the same rank or manually by the caster himself unless otherwise stated. Each circle seal can be overlapped with another. If at any time a circle seal it overlapped with another with conflicting effects, the higher ranked seal takes priority. If the seals rank are the same, then both conflicting effects are nullified.
Name: Safe Guard of the Senses (Shinjitsu Purotekushon no Jutsu)
Rank: C-B
Type: Fuuinjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: The 'Safe Guard of the Senses' seal's purpose is to protect the user from poisons or genjutsu that effect the sense. While the user is within the radius of the seal, their five sense will not be effected despite any neurological or psychological effects cast on them by an opponent's genjutsu. Chunnin are safe from 'C' rank and down genjutsu, and Jounin are safe from 'B' rank and down. This seal's effect cannot however restore sense that were lost due to some physical damage. In other words, if ones eye is damaged, the seal will not somehow make them see.
In 'C-rank' form, the radius is restricted to two meters from the user.
In 'B-rank' form, the radius of the circle is increased to 10meters, making it much more accommodating for the user.
Name:Summoning Rejection Technique (Agensuto Kuchiyose no Jutsu)
Rank: C-A
Type: Fuuinjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: The 'Summoning Rejection Technique' seal's purpose is to eliminate the immediate threat of Summoned Animals. The seal once cast will not only keep one from using the summoning jutsu within the radius, but all living thing's that were summoned will be 'unsummoned' the instant they enter the area of the circle. By 'unsummoned' it is meant that the connection keeping the animal tethered to the summoner is temporarily broken, sending them back to where-ever they were summoned from.
In 'C-rank' form, the radius of the circle is limited to 10meters and can only 'unsummon' C-ranked and down summons.
In 'B-rank' form, the radius of the circle is limited to 10meters and can only 'unsummon' B-ranked and down summons.
In 'A-rank' form, the radius of the circle is increased to 20meters and can 'unsummon' A-ranked and down summons.
Name: Element Rejection Technique (Soshi Chouin Maru no Jutsu)
Rank: C-A
Type: Fuuinjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: The 'Element Rejection Technique' seal's purpose is to eliminate the immediate threat of elemental jutsu. Once the element is declared, within the radius of the circle, it becomes impossible to create elemental chakra of that element, and nullifies control of the element. Thus, jutsu of that element cannot be used within the radius of the circle, and if jutsu is cast outside of the radius of the circle, they will lose their ability and structure upon entering the area of the circle.
In 'C-rank' and 'B-rank' form, the radius of the circle is limited to 10meters and can only stop nullify jutsu of it's rank respectivley.
In 'A-rank' form, the radius is increased to 20meters and can stop 'A' rank and down jutsu.
A shinobi can only nullify the casting of a jutsu of his own rank or lower. ( E.X. Chunnin seal cannot prevent Jounin elemental jutsu)
In the case of S-ranked jutsu, NONE of the effects apply. Elemental jutsu of S-rank can be used, even started within the seal without effects of the jutsu being altered.
Name: Hollow Technique Seal (Kuudou Jutsu no Fuuinsho)
Rank: A
Type: Fuuinjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: The 'Hollow Technique Seal' seal's purpose is to completely eliminate the use of jutsu within the radius of the circle. The Circle is 25meters in radius, and while inside the radius of the circle, chakra control become null and all jutsu, with the exception of taijutsu and physical combat, is impossible. This includes Shinobi, Summons, Puppets, AND the caster of the seal himself. However, the use and structure of jutsu cast outside of the Seal is not limited. Elemental jutsu, Genjutsu, etc., can be cast outside of the seal and their effects will be normal. Supplementary effects, however, cast prior to the setting of the seal, and outside of the seal after setting become nullified while within the seal. (Ex., a jutsu increases the opponent's speed, while inside the seal, their speed will be normal, however if they step out of the seal, their increased speed will be increased restored.) The seal's effect will last for three posts before fading. The seal can then/must be cast again to re-enstate it's effects.
Name: Dragon Coliseum Jutsu
Rank: S
Type: Fuuinjutsu
Element: N/A
Description: This is one of the most powerful of the Odolwa jutsu and one of the only Circle Seals that require hand signs. The user will form five hand signs and hold their hand to the required seal, before pressing their hand to the ground. A circle, 30meters in radius will be cast about the area, and from it's edge will raise a wall of intense 'light' As if a force field, extending up for about thirty feet and coming to a roof. If there are two shinobi within the walls of the circle seal, no more, no less, the seal will hold. If not, it will fade at an instant. The two shinobi are then trapped within the walls of the jutsu until one of them either passes out or dies. The 'light' walls are solid, in that it is possible to touch them. Anything that touches the walls of the circle are slowly sapped of chakra , and the impact of all ninjutsu will be absorbed, with the exception of an 'S-rank' jutsu. ( it must be stated in the post that the 'walls' surrounding the circle have this effect, so that the opponent is aware not to try anything foolish on false pretenses.)
History: The Odolwa clan go back later than the foundation of Sunagakure itself. They were originally a nomadic clan that traveled from place to place following food, water buffalo. They thus are very Earth element oriented. They remained a tribal clan for quite some time coming up to the creation of Kirigakure. Under the first Kazekage they were promised a part in the formation of nation of water. So the once Nomadic society settled down within the walls of a new village known as Sunagakure no sato.
However, as a result of not following their food source and settling down they became more dependent on Sunagakure itself and it's cultures had to be overhauled. The Odolwa clan, stubborn to keep their culture and traditions, continued with their normal rituals and as they became closer to the militaristic aspects of Sunagakure, began turning their rituals into jutsu and using them as signatures. This pool of jutsu continued to grow as it was passed down through generations and became an important part of the Odolwa's way of protecting their way culture. In the current day, it is possible to see the Odolwa members by their unique symbols, colors (Amber and Blue) and the tattoo's from their many unique rituals. Though neutral, the Odolwa remain a friendly and loyal part of the Sunagakure community.
Odolwa Shinobi were well known for their ability to survive and cope will in one on one situations. Before the graduation ritual of one on one combat was banned, nearly all Odolwa that were pitted against other Academy students and Genin were Victorious thanks to one of their secret jutsu. The specific jutsu was made forbidden by Third Hokage during the early days of his term, and has been eradicated from being passed from generation to generation. A version however, of that very jutsu is still taught, and also considered forbidden.
In common day, the oldest and highest rank Odolwa carry the burden of managing the teaching of the jutsu and leading the clan. A single branch of the Odolwa has been enlisted with documenting all of the Jutsu made sense their merge with Kirigakure and are treated like royalty with the highest respect in the clan. They never actually learn all of the jutsu, and are never allowed to become ninja. Finally, in the spirit of the samurai, apart of the original tattoo ritual equips each Odolwa with a seal to kill themselves, in the form of a jutsu. All shinobi are told about this seal, and instructed to activate it if captured to take the secrets of their tradition to the grave.
I obviously can't use any of these jutsus, but they are within the clan info, so I included them. I'll learn them when I advance in rank(s)
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| | | | Kibaka
Leaf Genin
| | Subject: Re: Ready for approval!!!(changed my min I'll just be with konoha) Sun Aug 09, 2009 8:00 pm | |
| Jutsus:
Weaponry:- Spoiler:
Name: The Art of the Cobra- Deathly blows Rank: D Type: Weaponry Element: N/A Description: A quick sequence of fast jabs with Karu’s Tanto. This is done with precise stabs to weak points on the body that will slow down the opponent and inflict great damage to them, but not kill them(unless very…very….very slowly XD) The tanto can be coated with a weak acid(about pH 5/6) to make the cuts to the body sting a little when it hits. Name: The Art of the Cotton Ears Rank: D Type: Weaponry Element: N/A Description: Using a blunt object, like the back of a kunai, Kazuki lightly raps a certain point on the back of a person’s head to weaken hearing, making it sound like their ears are covered in cotton. Lasts for three posts, unless they have some sort of healing jutsu, in which case it goes away in the next post. Name: The Art of Suicide Rank: D Type: Weaponry Element: N/A Description: A skill that took Karu a long time to master. He runs up to the foe, making it look like he’s rushing head-first into s fight. Just before the opponent is about to counteract, Karu will spin to the side, ducking or jumping and slice whatever the opponent was going to use to counteract(arm or leg etc),or use his mud flow river jutsu, or whatever suits him at the time. Name: Dance of The Fool Rank: D Type: Weaponry Element: N/A Description: A sequence of fast ducks, spins, and jumps emphasized by maniacal laughs and barks. Karu will wait for an opening in the opponent‘s guard, and suddenly break this dance by body flicking right in front of the opponent and spitting lemon juice(acid) into their eyes. Lemon juice, as we all know is acidic and stings the eyes and causes them to water. This gives Karu a chance to step in and use a cobra attack. Because this is only a sequence kind of attack, it is flexible and Karu can vary what he does. This is considered weaponry because the lemon juice is being used as a weapon. Name: Dance of the Stars Rank: D Type: Weaponry Element: N/A Description: Another dance-sequence jutsu. Karu quickly moves around several times, throwing glitter everywhere, mainly at/near the foe. This doesn’t do anything, but it is a useful distraction because it is shiny and makes the opponent think that it is dangerous in some way. This jutsu is pretty useless, but the opponent doesn’t know that…(  mwahahahaha…) This jutsu is a good device against the tactical opponent that may over think things. Karu ends the sequence by throwing shuriken and senbon at the opponent while their visibility is lowered. Senbon are harder to see because of their shiny whitish colour blending into the glitter, and the shuriken(easily seen) are the main distraction from the senbon. Name: The Art of Disarming Rank: D Type: Weaponry Element: N/A Description: Karu will use his chains to form a single coil ‘round a blade or weapon that is about to attack him. In one swift motion, he will continue pulling and twist the weapon, and with a single flick, and throw it away from the user. This is very unlikely to fail, because it’s done at point blanc. Name: Chain weights Rank: D Type: Weaponry Element: Earth Description: Using this jutsu, makes a length of chain weigh six times heavier than before. Can be applied to other weapons/tools.
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| | | | Kibaka
Leaf Genin
| | Subject: Ready for approval!!! Sun Aug 09, 2009 8:01 pm | |
| Fuuinjutsu:- Spoiler:
Name: Element seal: Dofuuin (Earth seal)
Rank: D
Type: Fuuinjutsu
Range: Item being held.
Element: Doton
Description: The user places a seal on an item which gives it some qualities of Earth. These are: resistance to fire and water, hardness and increased rigidity(It wont bend as easily)
Name: Paper confetti
Rank: D/C
Type: Fuuinjutsu
Range: Leaves a trail behind weapon
Element: --
Description: This activates two cotton bands around his wrists. They have a seal on them which, when activated, makes thrown weapons leave behind a stream of colourful glitter which floats around for a while. If he wants to, it can leave a trail of confetti exploding tags. These only explode when they come into touch with fire/lightning or another explosion. Releasing exploding tag confetti is a C rank
Name: Seal of extension
Rank: D
Type: Fuuinjutsu
Range: 10 metres
Element: --
Description: This activates the seal placed upon Kazuki's whip. This uses chakra to slightly alter the molecular composition of the whip to allow it to extend outwards in a sudden 'spasm'.
Name: Sealing foilage
Rank: D
Type: Fuuinjutsu
Range: On the tag itself
Element: --
Description: Using this jutsu, Kazuki can call forth a tree, 6 metres high, one metre thick, from a square paper tag. The tree will grow from the tag, and can be used as a defense. This tree can be used for various C rank jutsu, which can't be used at the moment.
Weapons: Name: Double-edged Tanto Appearance: It has a silver handle and the blade is half the size of his bamboo blade, but the thickness remains the same. Rank: D Special Abilities: Like his bamboo sword, it is imbued with earth chakra to give it resistance to fire and to make the blade stronger. It is double edged. Origin: Kazuki found this beautiful tanto hidden in the cavity of a tree. He decided to keep it. Name: Wave Whip Appearance: A black whip made of a stretchy leather. Rank: D Special Abilities: Chakra can be placed in the whip during an attack to make the whip more stretchy than it is. The whip can extend out 10 metres and the extra flick of the stretchy ability can be up to half a metre long. Origin: Kazuki was taught how to use this by his Aunt. He was taught the stretchy jutsu while in academy ‘cause it’s only a D rank. It took him two years mastering the whip. Name: Acids Appearance: Bottles/containers of a collection of acids varying in strength Rank: D Special Abilities: These are just ordinary acidic substances that can be used in jutsu. He doesn’t use them on their own however, and only in conjunction with a weaponry jutsu. They are non-corrosive, non-toxic, they are irritant, and the highest pH of acid he has is about somewhere inbetween pH three or four. Origin: Given to him by a Clan member who trained him for a while, who is an expert in them(and poisons) because acidic/poisonous weapons are very common for puppetry ninja. He gave Kazuki acid instead of poison because it is less likely to be used against him. Name: Dual daggers Appearance: http://starwarsrpg.pettycomp.net/Images/DualBladeSword.jpg Rank: D Special Abilities: These are ordinary dual daggers. Double edged, and perfectly balanced weight, making them good for throwing aswell. These are placed crossed on his back hidden by the scrolls, but easy to access. Origin: These dual daggers were made recently, and the same Clan member has just finished teaching him how to properly use it. Kazuki shows promise in fighting with dual daggers, and he's still trained by him, though he’s pretty much mastered them. No jutsu have been taught to him with these because they’re all B+ rank, however, some can be applied to these.
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| | | | Chouga Akimichi
Sand Jounin
| | Subject: Re: Ready for approval!!!(changed my min I'll just be with konoha) Sun Aug 09, 2009 8:27 pm | |
| Kekkkai Genkai is extremely OP and in no way should be allowed under any circumstances. Please completely change your Kekkai Genkai, to put in perspective your combining byakugan and sharingan with all their strengths and no weaknesses and adding bringing back the dead on top of it. | |
| | | | Kibaka
Leaf Genin
| | Subject: Re: Ready for approval!!!(changed my min I'll just be with konoha) Sun Aug 09, 2009 9:37 pm | |
| okay, i had a feeling it was a little OP even though it's canon
i'll make a custom KKG that's less OP | |
| | | | Chouga Akimichi
Sand Jounin
| | Subject: Re: Ready for approval!!!(changed my min I'll just be with konoha) Sun Aug 09, 2009 9:45 pm | |
| well the description I saw was:
Even though he was apparently paralyzed, Ranmaru's kekkei genkai gives him the ability to see through walls, cause illusions, and interfere with even the Byakugan. He can also use some other vaguely defined powers relating to vision. This bloodline does not have a mentioned name, but when used, Ranmaru's eyes glow red. Ranmaru's powers seem to be the most broad of any kekkei genkai, ranging from perfect illusions to the ability to transfer lifeforce to bring someone mostly dead back to life.
and did not include:
Ranmaru's vision has heightened perception and analytical powers not unlike the Sharingan, meaning Ranmaru can comprehend any details he sees to predict the opponent's next move. This ability contributed mainly to Raiga being so formidable in battle and becoming one of the Seven Swordsmen of the Mist. He can also see one's life force, allowing him to determine that Raiga, who had recently fallen in battle, was still alive, and he was able to transfer part of his own life force to Raiga. When activated, Ranmaru's eyes momentarily glow red. | |
| | | | Kibaka
Leaf Genin
| | Subject: Re: Ready for approval!!!(changed my min I'll just be with konoha) Sun Aug 09, 2009 10:07 pm | |
| lol
I got the info from two or three different sources
XD
anyway I made a custom one.
It has weaknesses! XD | |
| | | | Chouga Akimichi
Sand Jounin
| | Subject: Re: Ready for approval!!!(changed my min I'll just be with konoha) Mon Aug 10, 2009 2:16 am | |
| Nyeh T.T'
Ok heres a list of strengths to your kkg:
1) you can see though genjutsu without being affiliated with genjutsu
2) you can predict movements
3) analyze chakra flows
4) see 'micro' expressions
5) better hearing
6) stronger
7) more agile
8 ) can see life energy
Weaknesses:
1) bad with genjutsu (which your not affiliated with anyways)
2) bad fire control (which your not affiliated with anyways)
3) psycho
4) cant see behind them.
Based on the info given. I write this off as again 'extremely' OP.
Try again. | |
| | | | Kibaka
Leaf Genin
| | Subject: Re: Ready for approval!!!(changed my min I'll just be with konoha) Mon Aug 10, 2009 2:21 am | |
| >.>
fine, but I meant water chakra, jsyk.
and they have small chakra pools | |
| | | | Kibaka
Leaf Genin
| | Subject: Re: Ready for approval!!!(changed my min I'll just be with konoha) Mon Aug 10, 2009 2:33 am | |
| KKG has undertaken extreme surgery XD, here are weaknesses(that affect me) opposed to strengths
Strengths:
1) Echolocation
2) better, bat-like hearing
3) stronger
4) more agile
5) can smell life energy
6) Microexpressions
Weaknesses:
1) bad water control
2) psycho
3) small chakra pool
4) affected by loud noise
5)Powerful headaches
6)Mood swings
7)Weak pressure point that disables kkg and deafens user
8 ) slow metabolism- healing process is slower, and their body will need more maintenance to keep in shape.
Last edited by Kibaka on Mon Aug 10, 2009 8:27 pm; edited 7 times in total | |
| | | | Chouga Akimichi
Sand Jounin
| | Subject: Re: Ready for approval!!!(changed my min I'll just be with konoha) Mon Aug 10, 2009 2:37 am | |
| Nope.
Just to make sure I will wait for a second opinion buut I am pretty sure this is not gonna fly. | |
| | | | Kibaka
Leaf Genin
| | Subject: Re: Ready for approval!!!(changed my min I'll just be with konoha) Mon Aug 10, 2009 4:03 am | |
| okay edited again
I just edited the previous post to show my new KKG's weaknesses opposed to strengths | |
| | | | Fox
Sand Chuunin
| | Subject: Re: Ready for approval!!!(changed my min I'll just be with konoha) Tue Aug 11, 2009 11:00 pm | |
| Problem is only half of those weaknesses actually apply during battle, which is when they are most important to balance the strengths. Any weaknesses that occur after//outside battle are more or less irrelevant, because you can simply RP overcoming them or just claim to have 'healed after some time' (for example).
--> Genin may only have one elemental affinity, so remove one of them please.
--> Umbrella cannot be imbued with two elements, as you can only have one at Genin. Edit accordingly and make sure to edit what it can protect from given that one of these imbibed elements has to be removed.
---> I have noticed that some weapons are imbued with water and others with earth. Now that you can only have one element, these need to be edited so that any imbued with an element you don't have are changed.
--> Remove the bamboo sword's & the double-bladed tanto's ability to manipulate earth. That is well beyond a C ranked weapon's capability.
--> Scroll has WAAAAAYYY too many weapons and items inside it. 500 senbon?!?! Think 50 maximum, more like. Edit all of this accordingly.
--> Remove the "don't require chakra" from your weaponry heading. In a fight, it will be clear that these do not take nearly as much chakra.
--> Umbrella Protection needs updating as you cannot use both water and earth elements.
--> Bamboo Earth Cut needs to be removed. Justmanipulating the earth without a particular jutsu for a very specific effect is well beyond a Genin or C ranked weapon's capability.
--> Remove all jutsu of the element you chose to lose (so if you stuck with water, remove all earth technique, for example). | |
| | | | Kibaka
Leaf Genin
| | Subject: Re: Ready for approval!!!(changed my min I'll just be with konoha) Wed Aug 12, 2009 10:49 pm | |
| >.>
okay,
when did they change the rules about genin elements? | |
| | | | WTFlash
A ranked Missing-Ninja
| | Subject: Re: Ready for approval!!!(changed my min I'll just be with konoha) Wed Aug 12, 2009 10:58 pm | |
| They didn't. I can relate with Fox when I say that there was just alittle confusion. We both moderate on 'Ingoo' and there we are only allowed a single element at Genin rank. However, here, you are allowed two elements. | |
| | | | Kibaka
Leaf Genin
| | Subject: Re: Ready for approval!!!(changed my min I'll just be with konoha) Wed Aug 12, 2009 11:31 pm | |
| oh that makes sense ^^ also, where does it say the limit on senbon is 50? since I am a weaponry user, can I bump it up to 100 in the scroll and keep 50 in my pouch? One last thing, Only the weaknesses, I changed the KKG so they apply in battle, now only two really apply mainly outside battle. Read the description, compare it to other kkg's, it's weaknesses are really balanced now. - Quote :
Kumorimimi is a discreet kekkai genkai that (obviously), mainly affects the ears. It has a few good things about it, but there are other problems with it too.
Kumorimimi’s main ability is greatly improved hearing. Users of this KKG have hearing similar to a bat, and they use echolocation as a means of discerning their surroundings. It is not just their ears that receive vibrations, but their hairs. Their hairs act as receivers to sound/vibration, and they constantly emit and register a pulse of sound at 2500hz when the KKG is activated(for echolocation). Kumorimimi can also analyse micro expressions(through echolocation). This means that the user can tell if they're lying or not. Even the most natural liar cannot hide microexpressions. They can also 'smell' life-force, and tell if one is dead, unconscious or asleep.
Kumorimimi also gives the user a few passive traits for when the kekkai genkai is not activated, such as slightly better hearing, sharp teeth, and yellow/amber eyes. People with kumorimimi also seem to have more defined muscles/larger builds, and better agility than most.
However, people with kumori have smaller chakra pools than average,
And are useless at creating genjutsu above E rank. Their(ordinary) bushins of themselves can only hold realistic shape for a few seconds, making bushin no jutsu useless in battle. Karu only just managed to hold a bushin for a whole minute in the graduation exam. People with kumorimimi also have bad control of Water chakra(even though they almost always have an elemental affinity with it) when their KKG is activated and they usually develop slightly psychopathic tendencies the more they use the Kumorimimi.
Loud sounds and bright lights can also hurt the user more than normal when kumorimimi is activated. Users of kumorimimi are more likely to develop powerful headaches and mood swings that last three posts when dazzled by light. They will not be able to keep to one train of thought for too long, do any complicated actions that require precision and their movements will be slow and badly co-ordinated. When their KKG is activated, there is a pressure point just below their lower back that deafens the user and disables the KKG when it is hit with a strong impact. A person with kumorimimi will also have a slower metabolism, meaning wounds/cuts/bruises take longer to heal. Nobody really knows where they comes from, especially since there is no specific clan that claims to contain it. Karu's mother was an orphan, so she has no idea who she got it from.
Strengths: 1) Echolocation 2) better, bat-like hearing 3) stronger 4) more agile 5) can smell life energy 6) Microexpressions Weaknesses: 1)Bad water control 2)Psycho 3)Small chakra pool 4)Affected by loud noise 5)Severely affected by bright light. (REALLY severe, look at description) 6)Weak pressure point that disables kkg and deafens user. 7)Slow metabolism- healing process is slower, and their body will need more maintenance to keep in shape.  Crap at bushin no jutsu It's not OP >.> It's even negatively balanced. plllleeeaaassseeee approve!! | |
| | | | Kibaka
Leaf Genin
| | Subject: Re: Ready for approval!!!(changed my min I'll just be with konoha) Thu Aug 13, 2009 12:56 am | |
| sorry for double posting but Pat says I can't make a genin, I have to make an academy student.
I'm gonna totally edit the application | |
| | | | Kibaka
Leaf Genin
| | Subject: Re: Ready for approval!!!(changed my min I'll just be with konoha) Thu Aug 13, 2009 6:03 pm | |
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| | | | Nagori
Leaf ANBU
| | Subject: Re: Ready for approval!!!(changed my min I'll just be with konoha) Sat Aug 15, 2009 4:57 pm | |
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| | | | Absolute Greed.
Leaf Jounin
| | Subject: Re: Ready for approval!!!(changed my min I'll just be with konoha) Sat Aug 15, 2009 9:18 pm | |
| Lock your topics, Amari... | |
| | | | Adam
The Fourth Hokage
| | Subject: Re: Ready for approval!!!(changed my min I'll just be with konoha) Sun Nov 01, 2009 1:52 pm | |
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