Hwoarang's Equipment

Name: Soul Taker

Appearance:

Rank: S

Special Abilities: This Scythe is very powerful. In the day it allows Hwoarang to become faster and more stronger. He can pack a stronger punch and or kick. Also during the night, Hwoarang can make undead skeletons rise from the ground. (1 skeleton a post). These skeletons will rise with armor (Madara armor) and have katanas. Also their whole body is covered with black fire. If an opponent were to attack physically like a punch or kick, it would burn that person very badly. Also these skeletons do not die right away on contact.

Origin: Created in Konoha by Hwoarang's father back when his father was just a Jounin at the age of 23. When his father created this Scythe, it was just a normal weapon. But, until the day his father gave it to Hwoarang, the Scythe was updated. Hwoarang worked on it in grave yards, a peaceful and dead place. Coming up with ideas from the grave yard for his Scythe.

Working on it in the night, he was able to summon skeletons. And for the day he was able to make it to allow him to become very fast. Even allowing him to gain more strength. Having this weapon and its powers, Hwoarang considers himself the Grim Reaper. Although his father used this weapon for good, Hwoarang changed it to pure evil. Giving it a true reason to be created and even making it more powerful than ever. Even though Hwoarang's father's ghost could be disappointed in Hwoarang, Hwoarang's emotionless life doesn't really care.

Skeletons:

Speed: They are as fast as a S rank ninja, such as Hwoarang.

Weaknesses: Are solid ninjutsu, such as Earth or Ice.

Rank: S rank, they are as stronge as a S rank ninja.

How the creator disposes of the Skeleton: Tells them they are not needed and they vanish.

If sun comes out: The skeletons then collapse and there bones will just be on the ground.

Controlled by: Chakra

If Sycthe is dropped: The skeletons will then search for it and bring it back to Hwoarang, also if the Scythe is just dropped and not far away, Hwoarang can make the Scythe float back into Hwoarang's hands. Note! if an enemy tries to pick up the Scythe, black fire will set the Scythe on fire and burn the enemy causing him/her to drop it, only allowing Hwoarang to carry.

How they survive:

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Name: Black Fire Katana

Appearance:

Rank: S

Special Abilities: On the blade is Hwoarang's black fire. It only goes out, when his katana is in it shealth. Once, the sword cuts or stabs an area on the target, that spot will then catch on fire with the black fire, which will cause it to bleed badly and to have a really bad burn. Also once Hwoarang holds his katana, his whole body will catch on black fire, such as a armor.

Origin: Created by Hwoarang himself, once he joined Akatsuki and figured out how to control his Black Fire. Back then he learned how to make swords. He learned to be a black smith. Then when he joined Akatsuki he figured to make a blade. Once he did, he had an idea of combining his black fire towards his katana. Which it now and forever holds black fire.

Now he learned to control the fire and make it his armor as well with the sword. Since the black fire is always on the blade. The blade its self turned pure black, making it stronger and very hard to break. Hwoarang was always intrested in katanas. Its his favorite weapon, once he was taught how to make them, he spent a lot of his time making them. But, when he made this one it became his favorite and best created katana every. Due to the great creation of it and the fact he added abilitys to it.

OOC~ Longer origin, longer information on special abilities and why it does it. That's all and then I'll approve it for training. I just need to see more information so I can see a better reason behind their effects, it doesn't really make sense for your scythe to be draining body parts of their feeling and turning them to stone.

I deleted the specail abilitys from the scyth and edited more orgin info, is that good? ^^

OOC:~ S Rank equipment is meant to have a very good origin and description. It is meant to be a great creation that has great explanation and detail. Origin needs at least 5 lines or more for something S Rank, and now the scythe being S rank with no special abilities makes no sense.

Sorry, gotta step in, though you're doing a good job, Amari ^_^

A scythe that has no ability would be D rank.

You still need at least a few lines for the scythe.

Now then, as for the S ranked katana

2-3 Paragraphs for the origin, and at least a paragraph in detail about the special abilities ^_^

You are an akatsuki, uphold your title ^_^

ok i edited the Scythe and also put a new specail ability, also for the katana added more to both, but the origin might be small so just let me know and ill try to add some more

You've only really got 1 good paragraph for the first weapon, make it longer by another paragraph or two

Add a second and probably third to the second one.

hmm, the katana is alright, but I've never seen such an overpowered Scythe. Shunshin in itself is overpowered, I can't have you simply shunshining around your opponent and attacking them. And the whole becoming immortal at night thing... also OP. find someway to lower it's power.

EDITED!!!! =D My bestestest fwiend Pat! lol.

5 Blackfire Skeletons a post?!?!? OP. Change it to 1..

Make the Scythe less OP.

Create some sort of limit on how strong your bones are.

Ehh, I still need a second oppinion on the scythe.

if he uses the scythe at night and turns into a skeleton , he will not be able to create a chakra flow at all. So all his jutsu's will be worthless if he activates the scytes power...

dude...its naruto based.........almost anything can happen.......explain how a dog can talk in the series.....

it has nothing to do with that! but with the respect for the players that rpg here as Kaguya bloodlines!

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The Kaguya is a clan which possess the ability to manipulate and change their skeleton frame. They use their own bones as deadly weapons.

And you do the same with a weapon? in my opinion your special abbility should be erased instantly because it's Op! Disrespectfull and you don't even wrote a story to gain such a skill! Something others were forced to do! Nothing makes you better then other players around here because you have a purple name!

And besides i was just pointing out the flaws of your design! As skeleton you don't have chakra flow! Only a KKg like Kaguya can!


--> this is what you wrote!

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At night Hwoarang becomes one of the dead, a skeleton.

--> this is a description off chakra to perform jutsu's

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Chakra is simply stated, the energy you use when doing a jutsu. Basically, to do ninjutsu or genjutsu, you must mix your chakra (which is bodily energy collected from cells throughout the body) and spirtiual energy (which is gained through experiences). Then by doing the proper hand poses seals, the jutsu can be activated. Once chakra is activated, various techs and movements can be used. Without chakra a ninja wouldn't be able to do much.

So you are dead! only a bunch off bones! So you got no living cell's to gain a chakra flow from!! And even if you say you got enough spiritual energy to perform jutsu's in that dead state you again disrespect the player that play's the Jinshin on Us! Because he's the only one that can perform jutsu's as dead man! And even then he has a high cost of blood fuell to pay for that skill! So making you immortal at night and uber strong during day just because you have a weapon is just plain laugeble!

Pat wanted a second opinion! Here it is! And i bet Jiro,Wtf and Ls will say the same to you!

Alright. One, Anbu, don't post in apps, this is warning one. Two, I'm afraid Hwoarang, that Anbu is a hundred percent correct. I was quite certain that something was off that I was missing, which is why I asked for a second oppinion. The kaguya bit is irrelevant, but I'm afraid he is correct about the chakra system, because one, as he said, you wouldn't have cells to hold chakra, and two, you would not have any chakra system to transport chakra.

Alright, I deleted the part about me becoming a skeleton ^^

Hello Hwoarang

First very cool idea. Gives me a Grim Reaper vibe which is awesome. Everything looks great in my opinion except I would like more info on the skeletons. Since they are a major technique on you scythe it would only make sense if you elaborate a little on them. Not only that but basically they're NPC characters if you look at them overall. Thus should be examined like one.

1.How fast are they able to move? Since they're skeletons one would think they would move rather slow.
2.What are they're weaknesses?
3.What rank are they're fighting styles? Are they as good as a Genin, Jounin etc.
4.Are they sentinel beings or do you have they're own thoughts?
5.How do you (creator) get rid of them?
6.What happens if you use them and the sun comes up?
7. How do you control these skeletons? Telepathy, Chakra, Seals etc.?
8. What would happen to them if you were to lose or drop the scythe?

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Also these skeletons do not die right away on contact.

9.So do they regenerate or keep on fighting?

Also exactly how hot is this "Black Fire"? Is it as hot as regular fire or does it have special effects? I am asking this because if you were to fight someone who wears heavy plated armor and if they were to hit your skeleton, would they still burn?

Also please tell us how big the scythe and sword are. They could be toothpicks for all we know.